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:Graphic Novel Page:
a page of the graphic novel
I am working on.
plz critique my work. i wish to get better!

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:iconhuemanityink:
Looks solid, can't wait to see more.

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:icon11keith:
the pics and text its themselves are both good,but i think your text is to big and you should try to make the text fit in a bit more with the images.good work
:iconkoshersoulmachine:
I would put higher contrast on the pics, to make them easier to see, that is, simplify the focus, make it more specific. Frames I might make less hazy, make the whole page out of frames and incorporate the text into the pic, like at the bottom or top of the frame...otherwise its really cool, I like where its going, good mood.

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:iconlady-dracoleo101:
Well, for one, it is very unique! The colors really set the mood. I love unique graphic novels such as this! They make me want more!

However, the shading and text seems a bit monotone. Try making the text have a variety of sizes. As for the shading, the pictures you've chosen are fantastic - but, it's kinda hard to tell if the pictures are together or separate. It needs a bit more contrast between them.

I hope this helps you. I can't wait for what else is in store!

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:iconjustsuzaku:
like where its going. maybe change the way the text is surrounded with grey? i'm not sure what needs to change. good luck.

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:iconbleedoutthepain:
writing is a little poor spelling mistakes like i stared down at my berrata as "a"cocked it other than stuff like that its pretty good sweet graphics
:iconsteelunbreakable:
I like your style as far as the visual part goes. I think the text is a little too big.
:iconmanips:
Very good start...I think it looks great! Your graphics caught my eye above all the others on the page when searching "Graphic Novels" Keep up the great work!

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:iconmangostyn:
oh wow. This is crazy amazing. So solid and realistic. I will be watching you. ;D

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